What Am I?

She has a body like no other. Her smooth caramel skin shines in the sunlight from waxing. Her neck has little dots that appear to be moles or freckles. Neck, body, curves, and a hole leading straight to her heart. Some girls have strings attached; she has six.

Standing in the corner until one day she is played. She gets attention by sitting on the laps of those who know her well and those who do not know her at all. When I see her, she always seems fretful. I think it's because everyone holds her by the neck, twisting her knobs, and pinching her with a capo.

Her voice is mostly in tone, but I have found her to be sharp or flat at times. She sounds beautiful when she is  stroked right. I love to hear her sing.

People think that she's crazy. They say she has knobs in her head, and that they are attached to her six strings. The knobs are cold, shinny, and easily tighten. I know that every part of her has a purpose. No one can say she is worthless after hearing the scratching sound of her voice moving from cord to cord.

Don't bump into her. You will not like the way she sounds after you do.

I really don't know any other way to describe her. If you saw her walking in the room, you would know that she was born to play on the stage.

What is she?

It's a guess, not a test! Leave your guess in the comment section below. Thanks people!

First Workshop

The first workshop went very well. A lot of people had the same suggestions that I had, which made me feel more comfortable sharing my opinions. I wish that there was a way to give someone constructive criticism without it feeling like an attack on the writer. I really did enjoy the story and thought that it had a lot of potential to becoming a great novel.

If I could change anything about how we do the workshops in class, I would suggest maybe allowing everyone to say something about the story to begin with and then have an open discussion among classmates. I feel like everyone mentioned something that I wanted to talk about, but I was not able to do so because my turn was already over (don't get me wrong... I'm good at taking turns. I just like the open discussion more).

I liked the fact that everyone had their ideas and could relate to the story in a different way. It's the magic of writing that someone that doesn't know you can move you with a sentence or a word. I liked the story! What more can I say? 

I am curious as to what is the correct way for punctuating thoughts or ideas. I know that some people said that the thoughts were confusing in the story because they were in quotation marks similar to those used in actual dialog. It was also confusing to me. Do you use single quotation marks? Do you use double quotation marks? Do you put thoughts in italics? I don't know the answer. Someone help me!      

  

Emergency

At first I thought that Emergency was a story about drugs and alcohol, but after the second time of reading the story I realized that it has deeper meaning. The story, to me, is about someone finding out who they are and wanting to change. The first mentioning of Georgie is when he is mopping up blood in the emergency room crying. The narrator of the story seems to be confused as to why Georgie is crying, but he never fully understands the meaning to Georgie's sorrow. I believe that Georgie was unhappy with the position that he was in. I think that he knew that he could be so much more than the guy that mops up blood. Georgie even mentions later in the story that he "should have been a doctor," which supports my claim that he wanted to be more than what he currently was. 

I think that this story had a very interesting dynamic between drugs and there effects. The narrator, who works with and is friends with Georgie, seems to have a negative reaction to the drugs. Although the narrator can recall more of the events that happened during the time in which both he and Georgie were on drugs, the drugs seem to cause him to care less about life and detach himself from his surroundings, which cause him to later kill the baby rabbits. Georgie, on the other hand, seems to work better with drugs. Drugs cause him to retrieve the knife from the eye of the man, save the baby rabbits, and offer to save Hardee from war. 

I like the ending of the story where Georgie says, "I save lives." I think this is where Georgie accepts himself as who he is and is satisfied with what he has become.